I need help with my thesis statement for my English essay. It’s too long (in my opinion) and is awkwardly phrased. Pointers and suggestions are welcome.
Thesis: Declaring body image struggles and eating disorders as strictly women-only problems will further silence men who suffer similarly as well as cause them to feel ashamed about their health issues, therefore, they will not seek treatment.
Branding body issues as “woman problems” silences and shames the men who deal with these issues.Source: recoveringfrommyconvictions